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Von's avatar

A very interesting beginning, and world building.

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Rob Mortell's avatar

Solid start. I'm looking forward to reading more

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Janet Bess's avatar

I like the world building, but I wish more happened in this chapter. I don’t really get a sense of what our main character wants yet.

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Dragon Writer Luc's avatar

"What [she] wants…"

I know it's not stated in the headers, but (as in the index) chapters 1-5 are the prologue to the story. I don't write in media res (haven't really got a feel for it) so it does take a bit of time to reach anything that might fit the idea of a goal statement.

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Janet Bess's avatar

Interesting! So should I really be starting in chapter 6?

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Dragon Writer Luc's avatar

If you like having no context for what's going on, sure? I didn't write this book intending for people to understand it if they just skip part of it, but chapters are short so someone who likes puzzles might be able to figure it out.

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